Descriptive writing

Being startled all of a sudden, I ran to a horizontal-slider window, which was closed and covered with a worn-out green curtain. A breeze made me better as staying there waiting for him. I even started to doubt whether the room I was in was his room. The wallpaper around the whole room had an ivy pattern. The color which might had been pure white at first had been faded so that it looked like the color of my grandma’s hair. Against the wall, there was an enormous bed. On the bed, there was a blue bed sheet, newspaper, and a jacket. The latest newspapers were lying open, and a black leather jacket, which seems too small for him to wear, implied that he threw it off while hurrying to go out. Though I could not smell well because I was stuffy even with the open window, I could smell of the foot odor unmistakably. Contrary to my hopes, black bug-like socks were scattered around on the floor. The thing that made me more awful was dirty laundry overflowing from a laundry basket. His sweaty clothes, football uniforms, and underwear, even a hood with a red monster picture that I gave him for his birthday present were almost out of the basket.

 The only objects that harmonize with his original image in the room were a desk and chair. The desk was covered with books and pens. There was a book that he recommended me to read, books for research for his school projects, and also preparation materials for ibt Toefl. A black notebook, which he arranged the tips for ibt toefl neatly, was open. A black cushioned office chair looked comfortable. Next to the bed, there was a wooden antique dresser which was closed firmly that I couldn’t open it by fear that clothes might overflow. Above the dresser, antique ornaments that he might buy during his trip in Europe and Africa were in state. The ornaments and some books on the shelves also matched his gentility fortunately.   

Paragraph revision

 Every student can benefit from engaging in extracurricular activities. Students can have experiences that they can't have during the regular classes. For example, students can learn about new subjects, such as learning new foreign languages.Since students use their extra time, they can study efficiently and effectively. Also, students can learn about special skills including dancing in a social club and cooking. These new kinds of learning help students find their potentials and get their future plan which fits them better. Moreover, students can enjoy their hobbies through the extracurriculum activities like climbing a mountain and taking photos. Through the activities, students can have fun and develop themselves at the same time. Since there are lots of various advantages, students should engage in many extracurricular activities.  

Martin Luther King Jr.- Alliteration/Anaphora/Allusion/Ethos/Pathos

1 Alliteration

-   the use in speech or writing of several words close together which all begin with the same letter or sound

ex) (2^nd paragraph) …symbolic shadow we stand today, signed…

           (7^th) …from the dark and desolate valley…

           (8^th) This sweltering summer of the Negro’s…

           (10^th) The marvelous new militancy…

           (15^th) …great trials and tribulations

  The alliteration makes the speech poetic, making it pleasant and comfortable on the ears. It is catchy and sometimes humorous, which attracts audiences’ attention.

2 Anaphora

-  the repetition of a word or phrase at the beginning of a sentence, verse, or paragraph

      ex)

     (3^rd paragraph) one hundred years later,

     (7^th) Now is the time to~

     (9^th) We must ~

     (14^th) We can never be satisfied ~

     (17~24^th) I have a dream

     (26^th) With this faith,

     (30^th~) Let freedom ring from ~

     (last paragraph) from every village and every hamlet, from every state and every city,

  Since the anaphora emphasizes several key points that Martin Luther King. Jr. is willing to say, it helps the audiences of the speech understand and remember his ideas.

3 Allusion

-   a figure of speech reference or representation to a well-known person, place, event or literary work.

Ex)

”Five score years ago…(2^nd paragraph)” refers to Lincoln’s famous Gettysburg address speech which began “Four score and seven years ago…” King was speaking in front of the Lincoln memorial.

“Life, Liberty, and the Pursuit of Happiness (and the rest of paragraph 4)” is a reference to the United States Declaration of Independence.

“sweltering summer of the Negro’s legitimate discontent” refers to Shakespeare, Richard ⅲ, act 1, scene 1, line 1 with change with season.

There are many biblical allusions;

No, no, we are not satisfied, and we will not be satisfied until justice rolls down like waters, and righteousness like a mighty stream. Amos 5:24 “But let judgment run down as waters, and righteousness as a mighty stream.”

I have a dream that one day every valley shall be exalted, and every hill and mountain shall be made low, the rough places will be made plain, and the crooked places will be made straight; and the glory of the Lord shall be revealed and all flesh shall see it together. Isaiah 40:4-5 “Every valley shall be exalted, and very mountain and hill shall be made low: and the crooked shall be made straight, and the rough places plain: and the glory of the Lord shall be revealed, and all flesh shall see it together: for the mouth of the Lord hath spoken it.”

It came as a joyous daybreak to end the long night of their captivity. Psalm 30:5 “… weeping may endure for a night, but joy cometh in the morning.”

And when this happens, . . . we will be able to speed up that day when all of God’s children, black men and white men, Jews and Gentiles, Protestants and Catholics, will be able to join hands and sing in the words of the old Negro spiritual:

Galatians 3:28 “There is neither Jew nor Greek, there is neither bond nor free, there is neither male nor female: for ye are all one in Christ Jesus.”

4 Ethos is the credible proof the speaker has.

Leadership based on ethos helps maintain the leader’s high status. Ordinary people respect the leader due to his or her personal characteristics, including morality. Therefore, when the leader of ethos make a speech, it is good to make audiences concentrate and believe in the speaker’s saying. Since Martin Luther King Jr. was a minister who is regarded the most moral, ethos enhances the credibility of his speech, “I have a dream.”

5 Pathos is emotional proof that is provided.

Pathos is something emotional and enthusiastic. It is one of the most important ability of leaders, charisma in another name. It is an useful way of non-verbal communication. In the "I have a dream", Martin Luther King Jr. is using pathos effectively by making the speech emotional with proper voice, gestures, and language usages. He persuades audiences through mind, especially by making images through the speech.

Response to the article "A Point of View: Does more information mean we know less?"

             In the article, the author is making a question about whether a lot of information accessible to people have enhanced the knowledge of people. Alain de Botton’s view toward the question is non-changing and strict throughout the whole passage. He says “We pay a price for all the information we consume these days-and it’s knowing less”, which means that more information don’t help people to learn a lot. With a huge amount of information, people have difficulties to differentiate right and wrong information. The article points out these drawbacks of “information flood”. It is comparing the technology of these days with the religious things of the past. He is saying that it was much better for people to learn in the past, dividing his points into four ; novelty, fasting, wisdom, and elevation.

             The author is negative toward the novelty and fastness of today’s information. In the part of novelty, he states that while people try to attain the perfect level of technology and politics, they are missing a chance of reminding eternal truth. However, the author’s opinion is ambiguous that what is the truth and how a lot of information intervene people toward the truth. In my opinion, novelty is helpful for people because it keeps information new, which makes people always progressive. The development of information can develop people at the same time. The author should have mentioned how the progression opposes the eternity to strengthen the opinion. More information can also help people attain the truth since it makes people to think a lot in various viewpoints. In the part of fastness, he argues that the fast changing or updating information makes people confused compared to the previous timetabled routines. He also points out that it is difficult to leave a monument. However, instead of making monuments, fast information can help people know easily and swiftly. The accuracy of information increases, too. Therefore, the negative attitude toward the novelty and fastness of these days’ information is not understandable.

             The author claims that the religion in the past is better for people to elevate their wisdom than the much information in the present. He says people have lost the ability to sense information these days since they are caught by “flood”. In his points, getting information from the past, especially the few amount of religion, is the real deepening of understanding and thinking. He also says the low price of today’s information is not a good point since the quality is low. On the other hand, I disagree with the author’s point because the cheapness can be a strong merit of having an access on information.

             The author is showing a strict attitude all over the article, supporting the past and religion, while opposing the present and vast information. Alain de Botton keeps saying that people should diet on their information. I partly agree with his idea, however, I strongly believe that there are many good points of today’s technological improvement, especially giving people an opportunity to make an access to various information in a short time.

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It has been said that not all learning takes place in the classroom. Compare and contrast knowledge gained from personal experience with knowledge gained from classroom instruction.

           Knowledge is power. People gain knowledge in every situation all over their life. Children learn a lot from old people around them such as parents and teachers. They also learn a lot from new experiences including eating new food or riding a bicycle for the first time. Experiences and books are very different in the aspect of situation and memory. However, having experiences and getting taught theoretically are both very important for gaining knowledge.  

Knowledge gained from experience and that gained from books are different that the situation it is applied to is not same. People gain a part of knowledge in classroom. They read books, write essays, and take quizzes to make it clear that they get information right. This is the process of making the underground setting of knowledge. The basic components of knowledge can be taught to people by books in a classroom. In books, there is much information which shows the most accurate theories or whatever we can get from the theoretical world. Knowledge just gained from a classroom should be added by knowledge from real experience because of this. Reality is not the theoretical world. It is totally different because in reality, irrationality exists. People can make mistakes or errors in reality. In contrast to books which just show one aspect of knowledge, experience shows various aspects. Therefore, having experiences help people gain a bigger part of knowledge. 
      

Experiences make people able to apply the knowledge gained from books in reality easily. People feel easy to memorize specific information after they apply it in their personal experiences. Suppose there is a girl who has read a lot of books which contain information how to cook spaghetti. She knows perfectly about the ingredients needed to prepare and the cooking process theoretically. However, if she never try to cook spaghetti by her own, it is hard to say that she has perfect knowledge about cooking delicious spaghetti. She can get in trouble in reality that something goes different from books or theories. From that trouble, which is the real value of experiences, she can get the information by heart. People can complement their theoretical knowledge by experiences.

People have to do their best in gaining knowledge. Since people need to think constantly, learning process should also be continuous. It is important for people to save a lot of information in their theoretical knowledge and practice the knowledge in experience at the same time. The two methods should be harmonized for people to gain high-quality and long-lasting knowledge.

Ode to my honjungbbang

You look too cool

Make me open your cover

You look too sweet

Make me bite your body

You look too greedy

Make me give up my will

My sincere will

Beat your attraction

Become a real winner

Dear honjungbbang

You are my rival

Become a real winner