It has been said that not all learning takes place in the classroom. Compare and contrast knowledge gained from personal experience with knowledge gained from classroom instruction.
Knowledge is power. People gain knowledge in every situation all over their life. Children learn a lot from old people around them such as parents and teachers. They also learn a lot from new experiences including eating new food or riding a bicycle for the first time. Experiences and books are very different in the aspect of situation and memory. However, having experiences and getting taught theoretically are both very important for gaining knowledge.
Knowledge gained from experience and that gained from books are different that the situation it is applied to is not same. People gain a part of knowledge in classroom. They read books, write essays, and take quizzes to make it clear that they get information right. This is the process of making the underground setting of knowledge. The basic components of knowledge can be taught to people by books in a classroom. In books, there is much information which shows the most accurate theories or whatever we can get from the theoretical world. Knowledge just gained from a classroom should be added by knowledge from real experience because of this. Reality is not the theoretical world. It is totally different because in reality, irrationality exists. People can make mistakes or errors in reality. In contrast to books which just show one aspect of knowledge, experience shows various aspects. Therefore, having experiences help people gain a bigger part of knowledge.
Experiences make people able to apply the knowledge gained from books in reality easily. People feel easy to memorize specific information after they apply it in their personal experiences. Suppose there is a girl who has read a lot of books which contain information how to cook spaghetti. She knows perfectly about the ingredients needed to prepare and the cooking process theoretically. However, if she never try to cook spaghetti by her own, it is hard to say that she has perfect knowledge about cooking delicious spaghetti. She can get in trouble in reality that something goes different from books or theories. From that trouble, which is the real value of experiences, she can get the information by heart. People can complement their theoretical knowledge by experiences.
People have to do their best in gaining knowledge. Since people need to think constantly, learning process should also be continuous. It is important for people to save a lot of information in their theoretical knowledge and practice the knowledge in experience at the same time. The two methods should be harmonized for people to gain high-quality and long-lasting knowledge.
'all over their life'...throughout their lives
답글삭제'xperiences and books are very different in the aspect of situation and memory'....not sure what this means.
'getting taught'...being taught
'different that the situation'...different in that the situation
'in classroom'...in the classroom
'they get information right.'...they get the information right.
'the underground setting'...the background
'help people gain a bigger part of knowledge'...help people gain a wider knowledge.
'Experiences make people'...Experience makes people
'People feel easy to memorize'...People find it easy to memorize
'something goes different from books or theories'...needs rephrasing
'Since people need to think constantly, learning process'...the learning process
This is generally a good essay that shows evidence of a concerted effort to get to grips with the topic. Your argument, though largely sound, is sometimes a little unclear. I would recommend having a more detailed essay plan before you start the final version. Your grammar is essentially good, though be careful of making small mistakes. Be careful with your phrasing. This is though, a good essay. Grade: B